The trouble with “it”

 

“It” is as pernicious to the English sentence as “this”. “this is the reason why” should be “the reason why…”

The trouble with “it” is you never know what “it” is, to whom “it” belongs, where “it” is going in the sentence, and what “it” is trying to communicate

 Examples:

1. “Updating or giving your kitchen a makeover is the most cost rewarding renovation you can do for your home. It can also be the most expensive, but well planned and designed, it is possible to get a good return on a limited budget.”

suggestion: replace “it” with “and”, or start a new sentence with the object – ­ “A kitchen makeover is the most cost-effective and rewarding renovation you can do for your home, and if you plan well, you can get a good return on a limited budget, and avoid unnecessary expenses.”

2. “Your kitchen is the main hub of most homes, it is where you create meals.”

suggestion: “Your kitchen, where the family creates meals, and enjoys its informal moments, is the main hub of your home”

Scour your writing for needless words; passive language; negative language; past tenses, and hidden verbs that clutter your thoughts; weaken your argument, and complicate your meaning

Write with passion; edit with excellence

Loys

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